Írtam egy angol nyelvű dalszöveget, és először is a véleményetek érdekelne. Mi a véleményetek?

Ha nyelvtanilag valami rosszul van kifejezve vagy hibás, örülnék a korrekciónak.

Fractal dreames

I found a map on the stamp,

I found you wet in my tent,

but the distance between us

torsion n' torture for my eyes

Oh fractal dreames

every step to mean

a bit closer, never over

take your crown the queen of frozen arms

I love the way you dance n'

I love the way you move

I love you ever baby

along the time n' dimension closed

the gate is ever open, wind is blowing across the field, the land

it's a never ending story

rolling further

all demand

Oh fractal dreames

every step to mean

a bit closer, never over

take your crown the queen of frozen arms

The void is sleeping

underneath our blunket

our bed is on the floor

living like a monk kid

open every fucking door

in your mind

till

everything is breathing in

all the empty rooms

the wolves're eating up

our organs

till we escape to beyond

Oh fractal dreames

every step to mean

a bit closer, never over

take your crown the queen of frozen arms