Mi véleményetek az angol nyelvű versemről?

Még csak párszor írtam verset,de érdekelnek a vélemények.Ez angolul van,de volt hogy magyarul is írtam.

Ez egy személyhez szól:

My dear friend

Do you know that I am thinking about you now?

I am always thinking about you,all the time,all the day

You are a very important person for me,remember,and never forget it

I always think about you

When something is wrong

And you always make me happy

You are so kind and helpful,

Like nobody else

When I look into your brown eyes,

I always feel something warm in my heart

I love you so much,and I never want to lose you

When I can't write you,

I always miss your very much

And I sometimes think about whats going on with you

Then I can't wait to write you

And talk with you for such a long time

Everybody who know you,can be proud of you

And it is a very big luck for me,

That I don't only know you,but you are my friend

And I will be really proud of it

Nem tudom mennyire jó,csak érdekelnek a vélemények.

16/L