Ez jó lenne egy horrortörténet alapcselekményének? Ki lehet ebből valami hátborzongatót hozni?

Elkezdtem írni egy horrorsztorit. Itt van belőle egy kis részlet:

„Do you know the feeling when a knife enters your pregnant belly below your belly button? Now you’ll know it.”- said the woman and she stabbed Becky 3 times. After each stabbing the blade was twisted in Becky’s belly. She felt enourmous pain under her navel. She just cried and cried…

„Stupid bitch!”-said the killer and she went away.

Becky lied on the ground and cried permanently. The stab wounds on her pregnant belly were very serious. Her uterus and stomach were badly injured and because of this she lost much of blood. She bled from her vagina, her stab wounds and womited some blood, too.

Szerintetek folytassam tovább az írást, vagy nem érdemes?