Nagyon sűrgős. Angol levél?

Holnap hosszú levelet kell írnom, próbaérettségi keretében.(És szeretném, ha minél jobban sikerülne)

Meg is oldottam egyet:

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Ez lenne a kreálmány:(Minden hibámra kíváncsi vagyok, ill. hogy kb hánypontot érne meg érettségin).

Dear Alex,

I’ve read your letter and decided to answer. I don’t think that voluntary jobs would be my business, but I’ll try to gave you a useful answer. My opinion is that you must decide whether you want to have fun or do the most useful job. I think by visiting local hospitals you could get a lot people feeling better, and this one would be the most needed from the mentioneds. But as you are a sportman you should do something this way. Maybe training a youth sport team. As I heard Crewe’s local sport club is need to be got better. So this job will be the proper one for you, I’m sure. Unfortunately I have never had time to do any voluntary jobs, but I can imagine that you would enjoy one of them. Looking for your answer.

Best Regardz,

Krisztián

Ill. az angol tanárom említett valamilyen tagolást ami 4pontot ér.Ezt mikor és hogyan kell alkalmazni?NAgyon sűrgős légyszi segítsen valaki.