Angol fogalmazás-valaki lenne olyan kedves és kijavítaná?

- a Christmas elé nem írnék "the"-t.

- Because of -ból nem kell oda az of ("because of" után nem mondat jön, csak főnév, pl. Because of the rain, we stayed home - Because it was raining, we stayed home.)

- inkább úgy írnám, hogy "which is different from the ones in other countries."

- "in lots of zoos WE CAN meet" sima szórend, a can we inkább németes :D

- isn't szerintem csak gépelés, hogy kimaradt az n

- we are eating, mert folyamatos

- cookes, lunch, TV programs

- meg nem tudom hogy milyen stílusúnak írtad a gyakorlót, ez ilyen informális, baráti szerintem. Az ilyen "and yes" és "in a nutshell"-eket én nem használnék fogalmazásokban, csak élőbeszédben.

Talán lehetne más kötőszavakat and helyett: Firstly, we celebrate the Resurrection; Furthermore/Moreover/In additon, we have an amazing custom... És a végére írnék valamilyen összefoglaló/befejező mondatot (All in all, Easter is a very important event for me, I always look forward to it.)

Én ezeket vettem észre így elsőre, bár nem biztos, hogy a javításaim is jók.

De a zoo hogy jon ide?

Van benne tobb hiba mint amit #1 kijavitott

In many zoos, we can see/visit rabbits etc.

the boys sprinkle the girls... na de mivel? Mert Igy akar pisi is lehet annak aki nem tudja.

A sprinkle szóval nincs baj.

My favourite holiday is Easter. I know, everybody says that Christmas is the best and the most beautiful holiday with the falling snowflakes and the Christmas tree and because it’s also the holiday of love. I agree, that day also touches me, but my favourite one is Easter, because in my opinion, Easter is equally as important as Christmas. In Easter, we celebrate the Resurrection of Jesus Christ.

Our Easter traditions are unique and different from the English speaking countries. On Easter Monday, all boys and men get togeter to visit their female relatives and close friends to sprinkle some cologne or water in their hair, for which they get painted eggs and cakes in return. In England, parents usually have an Easter egg hunt for children, during which they hide eggs in their garden, and the children have to go find them. I really love that at this time of the year the weather is alreary nice and I like how there's a chance in zoos for children to let them pet animals such as rabbits, goats, chicken and sheeps, which all symbolize Easter.

An average Saturday in my family isn’t so exciting. In the morning, my father makes us breakfast, which is either scrambled eggs or french toast. During breakfast, we watch TV. After that, I go to my rabbits to feed them. It's my mother who usually makes the lunch. As main dish, we usually have some kind of meat with garnish which then follows some cake that we absolutely can't miss. On this day we also talk a lot with each other about things such as school and TV programmes. Finally, we spend the evenings watching detective shows.

"which then follows some cake?"

Igen. "Amit aztán süti követ"

Ezzel mi a baj?